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posted by
shypettite
on April 26, 2006 at 7:55 PM
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"An undisturbed moment..."
posted by
Ariala
on April 26, 2006 at 7:48 PM
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This is very beautiful! Undisturbed is the word you want in the final
stanza. Also, one has to be very careful to give mountains and nonanimate objects human feelings like "shame."
posted by
Ariala
on April 26, 2006 at 7:47 PM
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sweet
Hello,
My name is Graham and thank you for stopping by and commenting. I just read your poem, Early Spring Hike, and I really think it's sweet and distinct...very vivid, thank you for it!
Graham
posted by
gillfinn
on April 21, 2006 at 3:39 PM
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uplifting images
posted by
Azur
on April 21, 2006 at 5:20 AM
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You have left me...
with a beautiful mental image. Thank you
Mike's Goddess
posted by
mikes_goddess
on April 20, 2006 at 2:36 PM
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I enjoyed this poem
comparisons to mountains are always great. Coming from the West Coast mountains are something I long for. Interesting how you compared the mountains breaking out in spring to naked bodies embarrassed and trying to be clothed.
posted by
penguinrock26
on April 19, 2006 at 7:18 PM
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Wonder
Beautiful picture, thank you.
posted by
FARSAILOR
on April 19, 2006 at 5:36 PM
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shypettite --yes, a poem to try and remember.
posted by
scriber
on April 18, 2006 at 1:35 PM
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shy
Nature has a way of calming all self-made cacophany.
posted by
avant-garde
on April 18, 2006 at 12:35 PM
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I love this...it's very lovely! Beautifully expressive!
You might consider re-working those last 3 lines though.
posted by
Passionflower
on April 18, 2006 at 12:18 PM
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You, my dear, are quickly becoming my daily dose of inspiration!
Thank you!
posted by
Captain_Gulliver
on April 18, 2006 at 11:54 AM
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Beautiful
posted by
brettnik
on April 18, 2006 at 7:32 AM
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Captain, Mason, TAPS, JasonScyte, Joleen... Thank you all
for your reading and nice comments.
posted by
shypettite
on April 17, 2006 at 9:27 PM
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Nice writing...
good to meet another poet of nature.
posted by
joleen
on April 17, 2006 at 8:49 PM
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Shy, a pictorial and rich mindcsape. Well done!
posted by
Jomei
on April 17, 2006 at 6:45 PM
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A peaceful little journey, Thank you.
posted by
JasonScyte
on April 17, 2006 at 12:14 PM
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shypettite
How could one not hike amidst the wonders of nature? I like your poems.
posted by
TAPS.
on April 17, 2006 at 4:28 AM
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..I enjoyed the hike with you...
posted by
MasonGarrett
on April 17, 2006 at 2:31 AM
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Thank you, Captain
posted by
shypettite
on April 16, 2006 at 9:56 PM
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Shypettite: I love this line:
"The horizon line
frays with peaks
shooting into the sky
-ashamed with their nudity."
Very emoational, and powerful!
posted by
Captain_Gulliver
on April 16, 2006 at 9:47 PM
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