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beautiful images of memory!
posted by
brettnik
on May 15, 2006 at 8:02 PM
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you keep writing like this
and you'll go places
posted by
Xeno-x
on May 15, 2006 at 3:45 PM
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Lots to Like Here...
...such as the imagery, which is very strong, especially the kettle references. I think a lot of people will relate to this. I would maybe take out the reference to new shoes - it doesn't speak to your theme and it would shorten the whole thing to take it out, which might be a benefit. Oh, what else I liked was the ending - very appropriate, very well worded. Overall, too, the centering and short lines really added a nice effect. Keep it coming!
posted by
TallAndSkinnyPoet
on May 15, 2006 at 3:02 PM
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