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Thanks.
I appreciate your comments, to be honest I wrote that in a hurry whatever popped in my head. I don't even know what it really means. I just like playing the words, as for the rhyming scheme or lack of it, you are probably right. I did not put much effort into my writing so I don't expect people to appreciate it so much.
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marieclaire66
on June 29, 2006 at 11:08 PM
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Marieclaire66, this is superb. That's my first response MC66........
I am saddened that not one readers (and there are many) left a comment. The bright side is that I get that honor of being first. I liked the cadence of this poem; the contrasting metaphors of what "s/he did" and what "you/I did" works well, and may benefit if each stanza worked more closely with rhymes. That's my tiny nit/suggestion. BTW, what does your fav quote mean: "Honi soit qui mal y pense."
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ILLUMINATI8
on June 29, 2006 at 12:35 PM
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