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SWFTFOX awakes
posted by
ILLUMINATI8
on July 16, 2006 at 6:26 PM
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off to work, wish me luck. feeling drowsy and tired already!
posted by
marieclaire66
on July 16, 2006 at 12:56 PM
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Innocence with humor!!! Wonderful. Stop putting yourself down!
posted by
swftfox
on July 16, 2006 at 9:29 AM
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posted by
ILLUMINATI8
on July 16, 2006 at 2:56 AM
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that's what they all say! Anyway it is good night from me.
posted by
marieclaire66
on July 16, 2006 at 2:55 AM
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Simple is often profound. Gandhi said "simple living-high thinking" after
other thinkers, perhaps TOLTOY. I liked the kids spelling--and may have commented so in one of my copmments per haiku. Never throw away your work, not matter how bad. Lock it away, perhaps..... and about huffing and puffing at your home? No, I have been onluy known to puff away clothes!
posted by
ILLUMINATI8
on July 16, 2006 at 2:41 AM
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yeah I am surprised you liked it. I tried to make it sweet.
from the kid and parent point of view. The sense of pride, the clumsiness, note the spelling at the end. doll= like a pun. The child seems to be a girl, my own daughter perhaps, she was mad on dolphins when she was a little girl. Thanks for that, I am really chaffed, did not think it was any good. I am sometimes embarassed by the simplicity of my poems. I feel as though it is too child like.
posted by
marieclaire66
on July 16, 2006 at 2:08 AM
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Touching.Parents adore these moments.I've collected my daughters' scribbles
This short poem packs a punch; you build it up slowly into a delightful crescendo. I say this often--'love short poems that do a lot; there's mauch action, a child's complete drawing from start to finsih, int his one. Never judge your own art, marieclaire. You almost did not think this was good! Viva Les' artes (pardon my French this early in the m
orning. Bon Jour).
posted by
ILLUMINATI8
on July 16, 2006 at 2:02 AM
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