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posted by
swftfox
on July 28, 2006 at 7:41 AM
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CLICK
posted by
ILLUMINATI8
on July 28, 2006 at 7:22 AM
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Dave, I loved the offerings & waterfall in winter-yes,WINTER WONDERLAND
great work, Dave. I owe you many clciks brother! Shalom---drop a line
posted by
ILLUMINATI8
on July 27, 2006 at 6:08 AM
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Swftfox, check out my French lesson, in my writing blog. Ypun asks for
French tuition so here it comes, for all who are interested.
posted by
marieclaire66
on July 27, 2006 at 12:30 AM
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lucky you!
posted by
marieclaire66
on July 26, 2006 at 7:47 PM
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WOOHOO!!! Two votes for ice!
posted by
swftfox
on July 26, 2006 at 7:23 PM
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Hi I picked the same one too.
posted by
marieclaire66
on July 26, 2006 at 7:02 PM
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Hey Shawn, Thanks for your comments. Actually, I think you are missing a
point here and I see how it can be confusing if one does not write haiku. A haiku is strictly a three line poem, no more, no less. The reason these don't always seem to flow together is because they are not meant to. Each one stands alone, but this is considered an anthology of sorts. The reason for all of them having a central theme is for Ypunday's haiku contest. I write them here and post, then take the whole mess over to his place for the contest. So you see the last three have nothing to do with any of the others and the winter one is only there because I accidentally put it there instead of at the beginning. Sorry it was so confusing. Glad you like them though. I post so often because Blogit is such great motivation!
posted by
swftfox
on July 26, 2006 at 6:51 PM
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Lots to Love Here
More vivid work, expresses one's awe of nature and all the possibilities in our lives through the wonderful variety we see in nature, + I like the overall color scheme.
winter wonderland
water falls off rivers edge
crystalline beauty
This might be the best stanza to end everything on (assuming it's all one poem), suggesting that the writer will never forget what he/she has seen. The last 3 stanzas are a little confusing (though very well written) with what came before.
More strong work, I'm glad you post stuff so often. 
--Shawn, "Tall & Skinny Poet"
posted by
TallAndSkinnyPoet
on July 26, 2006 at 6:17 PM
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