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Many folks reached out--- and they love you. U r healing & stringer than u
may appear to be at first blush. Perhaps we all have a mix of these images from our experiences or intimacies with the universe. Only if u revise, i would leave out the "cry wolf" reference because it adds another layer of fairytale and that ma y be (MAY BE) one too many. Thats all for now luv
posted by
ILLUMINATI8
on July 30, 2006 at 9:27 PM
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Beautiful...I love the entire piece.
So many emotions felt as the poetry swirled through the thoughts and dwept into the heart. Nicely done.
posted by
Original_Influence
on July 29, 2006 at 4:23 AM
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Don't give up
you will find a counsellor who will help... in the meantime don't lose hope. We are all so much stronger than we think we are, even though things can be very tough at times I know. You have so many good wishes and a lot of support here.
posted by
mneme
on July 29, 2006 at 12:23 AM
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been there done that. I do have a wonderful lady who can really help me.
I need to go back and see her. She helped me a great deal, you cannot do much for me, other than sympathise with me. All the shrinks gave up on me or I gave up on them. In the end, God is the greatest healer. I am a bit of a mess, but if anyone had walk in my shoes, they might be too. I am definitely going to get extra help, looks like I am stuck again but I have felt God's healing touch in my life on many occasions. I do appreciate your kindness.
posted by
marieclaire66
on July 28, 2006 at 11:49 PM
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Hello, marieclaire...is it possible for you to talk to a professional...
that is what i did during a time of great pain and personal crisis. it was the BEST thing i ever did for myself! i was trying to write my way through my troubles, but sometimes our saddness and grief is too much for us to bear alone.it is not good to be alone and so sad, marieclaire. i wish i could come and visit with you.
posted by
muser
on July 28, 2006 at 11:44 PM
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thanks so much, you cannot believe the therapeutic value of the writing
process, I feel as though my soul is being turned inside out. So much pain pouring out, it is quite frightening come to think of it. I feel tempted to walk away and put the lid on it, but will that help? I feel anger rage pain sadnes all rollled into one tight ball. I wish I was normal. I tap into deep feelings or I cannot write.
posted by
marieclaire66
on July 28, 2006 at 9:47 PM
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Marie Claire. Those of us who understood the poem are crying with
you, walking with God with you. Never hide away your little girl heart. Remember it was said "unless you become as a little child, you will never see the kingdon of God" Keep writing. Your form was good, your style was good and you obviously needed to do this. That makes it essential! Many of us understand and we are listening and we are here for you. Beyond that, all I can say is WOW! God Bless!
posted by
swftfox
on July 28, 2006 at 9:43 PM
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A beautiful poem . It is stranger than many fairy tales. It is nice . Thank
You.
posted by
afzal50
on July 28, 2006 at 9:22 PM
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don't cry nmeme or I will cry too. Ypun thanks.
writing is my passion, and I want to do something with it, but I really want to improve because publishers show no mercy and will pick and spot every possible weakness in my writing. I also know the rythm is not consistent enough, just cannot get the feel for it. With a bit of coaching, trimming I could turn my poetry into a great bonsai??? No that would be torture...
posted by
marieclaire66
on July 28, 2006 at 7:06 PM
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Marie-Claire
I was crying by the second verse and am in tears now. This is from your heart, and I get it - absolutely. Never apologise for having the gift of being able to communicate so movingly. Is there any way you could go home to France for a while? You don't want to leave for good, because of your son, I understand that, but going home helped me get back some equilibrium and it is very warm there just now.
posted by
mneme
on July 28, 2006 at 7:00 PM
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You ought to be proud--Englishis my second language but that is from age 6.
You have done good enough work to be encouraged to do more with it, in terms of publishing etc. See, NAJWA identifies so closely with this tale/truth
Shalom 
posted by
ILLUMINATI8
on July 28, 2006 at 6:38 PM
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I did not think you did, and I do want a happy ending? don't we all?
ending is a bit ironic don't you think? end of story end of like...
posted by
marieclaire66
on July 28, 2006 at 4:30 PM
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No I did not see it as a pretty story
but of course we never stop wanting happy endings
posted by
Azur
on July 28, 2006 at 4:01 PM
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HI DID YOU KNOW????????? SOME OF IT IS FROM MY LIFE STORY BUT I STILL HAVE THE LITTLE GIRL HEART WHICH LOVES EVERY ONE AND CRY FROM EVERY ONE
STRANGER NAJWAYOU ARE WONDERFULL ALL THE WAY TO THE END BUT I DID NOT FINISH IT YET
I MEAN MY STORY..................................
posted by
NAJWA
on July 28, 2006 at 3:48 PM
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passion flower, did I pick the wrong format? I like trying different styles
actually this is the way it came out, I did not really conscientiously decide. It stinks, it is my life, and to you all, it is just another pretty story?, ouch. I know it is too long but for once I am aloud, after the short and sweet stuff I usually write.
posted by
marieclaire66
on July 28, 2006 at 3:17 PM
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We can see our lives clearly through such
tales. We too want a happy ending. Take care mon cheri ami
posted by
Azur
on July 28, 2006 at 2:56 PM
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marie-clarie
Very good title, and story. Also, thanx for your honesty. If I have good comments from you, I think everyone else will agree it makes sense.
Furthermore, I have written four new poems in one day and if you a mistake whether you read them, then don't hesistate to tell me.
Extremely prolific details to your story. Nice!
posted by
coolacen
on July 28, 2006 at 2:48 PM
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Seems like it ought to be a short story...
Might make a good one.
posted by
Passionflower
on July 28, 2006 at 2:47 PM
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