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'Lot' just happened to rhyme better. I plead guilty! Rats!
posted by
Antonionioni
on October 5, 2006 at 11:10 AM
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excellent
posted by
star4sky5
on October 5, 2006 at 10:03 AM
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Very good, but come on Tone... it's 'car park' surely.
posted by
_dave_says_ack_
on October 5, 2006 at 9:39 AM
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Hi Tony
Strong but kind in the telling of truth, nice flow, hitting the right spot, well wrote. Mike
posted by
lionladroar
on October 5, 2006 at 8:07 AM
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..very direct.. honest...
posted by
MasonGarrett
on October 5, 2006 at 8:00 AM
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Tony
Well said and done good post
posted by
Kat02
on October 5, 2006 at 7:18 AM
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I like your 30 th.
posted by
shypettite
on October 4, 2006 at 9:10 PM
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PS
I've just gone back a few pages and you had a question about how you can respond to comments and still view them at the same time. I open two internet windows, that's the beauty of broadband. Also means that you click on the writer's page twice (hadn't thought of that till now...!)
posted by
mneme
on October 4, 2006 at 8:33 PM
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Hey, you changed your rhyming scheme.... very clever. I like the part about not always having to be 'looking for someone'; there is a strength in self-sufficiency, so long as it isn't taken to extremes. (I'm a Libran and everything has to be balanced. On the other hand.......)
posted by
mneme
on October 4, 2006 at 8:27 PM
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Nice Poem.
posted by
afzal50
on October 4, 2006 at 5:42 PM
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Thanks for your kind comments!
Yeah, it's weird how if you write to a form, such as the sonnet, it somehow helps you to come to observations and conclusions much quicker than just writing completely freely - I find anyway. It's the sonet that does it - not me!!
posted by
Antonionioni
on October 4, 2006 at 3:07 PM
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Great work
posted by
_Symphony_
on October 4, 2006 at 2:50 PM
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I always want to say that to people who are feeling sad....
...(or myself) that they will be happy again. Though I know at times it's hard to believee!
posted by
nonconformist
on October 4, 2006 at 2:35 PM
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You most certainly have a creative, weaving, and twisting (not twisted) mind. The path you take us on leading up to this line, for example you’re not hurt bad enough to bleed. Great work!
posted by
Troosha
on October 4, 2006 at 12:50 PM
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YOU HAD WRITTEN THE WISDOM OF LIFE IN VERY CLEAR WORDS.
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....najwa
posted by
NAJWA
on October 4, 2006 at 12:33 PM
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