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No need to duck coz 'tis the tense that becomes intense. Like u that way

posted by Bhaskar.ing on March 3, 2007 at 12:03 AM | link to this | reply

A bit too much probably

Maybe my writings are a bit too intense of late. I maybe should write about things which are a bit more dusty. Like Wordsworth did. Oops that I didn't say that, did I? *ducking for cover, I'm in for it now!*

posted by Discombobulated78 on March 2, 2007 at 11:58 PM | link to this | reply

Yes, to obedient school for it to cool. Oh, I needed it so much for you.

posted by Bhaskar.ing on March 2, 2007 at 11:53 PM | link to this | reply

Cool! So you've sent it to obedience school then? :)

posted by Discombobulated78 on March 2, 2007 at 11:47 PM | link to this | reply

I have a perfectly well-behaved net now.

posted by Bhaskar.ing on March 2, 2007 at 11:43 PM | link to this | reply

Yes, pass by, then come around again.

Like the Wheel of Fortune.

posted by Discombobulated78 on March 2, 2007 at 11:42 PM | link to this | reply

I pledge it will pass, or should it ne pass by?

posted by Bhaskar.ing on March 2, 2007 at 10:15 PM | link to this | reply

Wise words, my friend...

posted by teddypoet_TheGoodByeFade on March 2, 2007 at 3:40 PM | link to this | reply

Thanks for all the comments, it's getting better

posted by Discombobulated78 on March 2, 2007 at 9:44 AM | link to this | reply

Very Nice Poem.

Good work here. Keep it up.

posted by jasoncaron on March 2, 2007 at 7:26 AM | link to this | reply

Discom - you're right, it will pass.

In the meantime, you're expressing how you feel now, which is healthier than bottling it up, I'm sure.

posted by Antonionioni on March 2, 2007 at 5:15 AM | link to this | reply

WEll written .

posted by afzal50 on March 2, 2007 at 4:31 AM | link to this | reply

posted by shypettite on March 2, 2007 at 4:31 AM | link to this | reply

that sticky black stuff seems to never come off ..