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cool, cool, cool....
posted by
star4sky5
on April 12, 2007 at 7:11 PM
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Thank you Troosha - I do like doing this romantic stuff - look out for more
posted by
Antonionioni
on April 12, 2007 at 9:06 AM
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Thanks, Mneme - I almost did it in Shakespearian language!
In fact, there are some traces of that in there, such as the use of 'smite' which is an obsolete word. I have done a couple of sonnets in old language before and enjoy it, but in general I try to use modern language.
posted by
Antonionioni
on April 12, 2007 at 9:05 AM
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Thanks so much, Bhaskar. You have encouraged me to occasionally
delve into the old styles and atmospherics by showing in your posts that people today can still relate to them, even though the romantic style is absent from most modern poetry and literature by dint of ever-changing fashion.
posted by
Antonionioni
on April 12, 2007 at 9:02 AM
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Thanks so much, Najwa.
What great words, and also I love the images there at the end! You have picked up on the sadness in the poem and responded to it.
posted by
Antonionioni
on April 12, 2007 at 8:59 AM
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Hi Discom - thanks - I tried to lend it a particular aura.
posted by
Antonionioni
on April 12, 2007 at 8:57 AM
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Ace, this is a really good question.
You are quite right - I meant to be specific in the first line or the second line about who this lady was / is, but for whatever reason her name never found its way in. Although I took quite a long time over it, I was at the same time struggling to finish it because of other things going on. I think you have highlighted a weakness of the poem that it doesn't say who it is about. I intend to do more sonnets about this particular lady. I may reveal who it is I'm talking about then. Watch this space!
posted by
Antonionioni
on April 12, 2007 at 8:57 AM
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Tony
Showing us the "softer" more romantic side of Tony - I like it. I more than like it - it's beautiful.
posted by
Troosha
on April 12, 2007 at 8:36 AM
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tonyzonit
i've been absent a while, I sign in and look what I find.. very Petrarchan.
'twould be fun to see it in Shakespearean English - brilliant as it stands of course :)
posted by
mneme
on April 12, 2007 at 6:52 AM
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Why,...you brittle-hearted Tony
This work is a classic, and like Discom beautifully says, "Ethereal and lilting". My heart feels quite warm, let me check out.
posted by
Bhaskar.ing
on April 12, 2007 at 6:07 AM
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I am writing for you the words of tomorrow
When GOD comes on the land and no sorrow
If the GOD is the LOVE so the LOVE is not here
But how we cry and laugh for living every dear?
If GOD is here why the ugly unkind hearts in fear?
And who is the one will be the star of pains and tears?:
Love is the life and the life is the short time
Love is the beauty and the beauty is our sign
If you ever smell that wood smoke in the far
You will find the fire ball in love with shine star...
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....najwa
posted by
NAJWA
on April 12, 2007 at 2:08 AM
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Ethereal and lilting :)
posted by
Discombobulated78
on April 12, 2007 at 1:55 AM
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Nice poem tony
I am not really into romantic or love poems but I like the nature and religious references, kind of makes me wonder a bit just who you are addressing in the poem. Are you like a transcendalist talking about God or do you mean Mother Nature or do you mean your woman. Good stuff as I think in a way it coudl be all three. Later.
posted by
AceGemini
on April 12, 2007 at 1:45 AM
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Kabu - oh thank you (blush). hey, just a minute...
posted by
Antonionioni
on April 12, 2007 at 1:33 AM
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Thanks Afzal - that's really kind of you.
posted by
Antonionioni
on April 12, 2007 at 1:32 AM
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Tony love it, love it love it.
posted by
Kabu
on April 11, 2007 at 6:22 PM
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I feel often inspired by your poem and its remarkable style .
posted by
afzal50
on April 11, 2007 at 5:18 PM
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Hi Proc - thanks - actually, I do enjoy writing romantic things now and
again. I must do it more often. Thanks again!
posted by
Antonionioni
on April 11, 2007 at 2:42 PM
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Yes, OTA - I really have neglected the romantic side of things!
Bit like real life??!!
posted by
Antonionioni
on April 11, 2007 at 2:40 PM
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Thanks Mary - I love your input!
posted by
Antonionioni
on April 11, 2007 at 2:40 PM
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lovely lovely poem.So romantic.
Yep it does remind me of Robert Frosts Stopping by Woods on a Snowy Evening.
posted by
proc
on April 11, 2007 at 2:34 PM
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Tony
ahhh.. a sensual side... quite a romantic sonnet today. I want to read it again!
posted by
Blue_feathers
on April 11, 2007 at 1:50 PM
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Tony
Yes! That's it! Wow, interesting I would pick up on that.....I so surprise myself sometimes. Oh, you're so welcome, Tony. I think you're a terrific writer. --Joy!Mary
posted by
FoliageGold
on April 11, 2007 at 1:47 PM
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Thanks Chris - I appreciate it!!
posted by
Antonionioni
on April 11, 2007 at 1:43 PM
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Hi mary - what you quote sounds like Robert Frosts's poem
about the wood in winter -..."and miles to go before I sleep..." Is that what you had in mind? I nearly wrote this in Elizabethan language - that's the kind of mood I was in, but I resisted, although there is still a quaint feel to this one. Many thanks for your pertinent and appreciative comments!!
posted by
Antonionioni
on April 11, 2007 at 1:42 PM
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Tony-this is truly excellant! Wonderfull! Chris.
posted by
Scramble
on April 11, 2007 at 1:09 PM
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Tony
This is beautiful........ I don't know why but it reminds me of: "The woods are lovely, dark and deep. He has kept his promises and earned his sleep." I can't remember the name of the poet who wrote this, but your work invoked this imagery for me. Well done. --Joy!Mary
posted by
FoliageGold
on April 11, 2007 at 12:35 PM
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