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foliage
I was looking for something that many could relate to in one way or antother. Something that may make someone turn around and choose another path. The descriptions are vivid and at the same time, non-descript.........it could be anyone, it could be anywhere
posted by
TIMMYTALES
on April 19, 2007 at 6:47 PM
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foliage
I would greatly appreciate your feedback. The story is a short one. Another couple of days and it will be at its end.
posted by
TIMMYTALES
on April 19, 2007 at 6:45 PM
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Timmy
Ah, okay. It reads as real so that's a good sign. I'll read with a different eye now that I know it's fiction. One thing to keep in mind while writing this kind of a story is to 'stay on top of the words'. ANd what I mean by this is, try to stay away from a character delving too deeply into self-pity. Stay on top of it. --Joy!Mary
posted by
FoliageGold
on April 19, 2007 at 6:42 PM
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foliage
Stricly fiction on my part. YES, comments, feedback, suggestions........especially from someone that has been published are very welcome.
posted by
TIMMYTALES
on April 19, 2007 at 6:35 PM
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Timmy
Are you wanting suggestions with regard to writing? Are these your memoirs? --Joy!Mary
posted by
FoliageGold
on April 19, 2007 at 6:31 PM
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Re: interesting story
Thanks!!
posted by
TIMMYTALES
on April 18, 2007 at 7:06 PM
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interesting story
posted by
star4sky5
on April 18, 2007 at 7:05 PM
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Re: Tim is this you? if it isn't your research is superb. I'm waiting for more.
Kabu........believe it or not, my research is nothing more than observation and second hand knowledge. I am very proud of this story and hope that you enjoy the rest. Another chapter will be posted tomorrow.
posted by
TIMMYTALES
on April 18, 2007 at 6:18 PM
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Holy Grail
Not my story but as I have stated, it could easily have been. I hope you will enjoy the rest of it
posted by
TIMMYTALES
on April 18, 2007 at 6:16 PM
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wiley
LOL......This is not about me exactly although it could easily have been. Thanks my friend
posted by
TIMMYTALES
on April 18, 2007 at 6:15 PM
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Re: what a sad and vivid picture.
Proc, it is sad and all too real. I hope that you will continue to follow
posted by
TIMMYTALES
on April 18, 2007 at 6:13 PM
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offy
I imagine it is all too true for many.......not me though. I hope you continue to read
posted by
TIMMYTALES
on April 18, 2007 at 6:13 PM
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offy
I imagine it is all too true for many.......not me though. I hope you continue to read
posted by
TIMMYTALES
on April 18, 2007 at 6:13 PM
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Troosha
Not exactly there, but too close for comfort. I hope you continue to follow the story to its end
posted by
TIMMYTALES
on April 18, 2007 at 6:12 PM
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Manda
I hope that means that you liked it?
posted by
TIMMYTALES
on April 18, 2007 at 6:11 PM
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Tim is this you? if it isn't your research is superb. I'm waiting for more.
posted by
Kabu
on April 18, 2007 at 5:11 PM
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Oh my goodness, is this your story? Either way, I can't wait to read the rest. You've obviously come so far.
posted by
Holy_Grail
on April 18, 2007 at 4:35 PM
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TIMMYTALES
Are you my son? You could be my oldest son, and I love him too
posted by
WileyJohn
on April 18, 2007 at 4:27 PM
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what a sad and vivid picture.
posted by
proc
on April 18, 2007 at 2:05 PM
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Tim
Is this true? It reads so vividly!
posted by
Offy
on April 18, 2007 at 1:45 PM
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Timmy
It reads like you've been there/done that.
Well done...
posted by
Troosha
on April 18, 2007 at 1:38 PM
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posted by
Amanda__
on April 18, 2007 at 12:05 PM
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