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Re: Sorry, but I am in a proof reading mood
he's 16 jesus just read it and keep the technical shit out
posted by
Shanlizer88
on January 5, 2008 at 10:44 PM
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hope things get better...
posted by
star4sky5
on January 4, 2008 at 5:31 PM
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hope things get better...
posted by
star4sky5
on January 4, 2008 at 5:31 PM
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Sorry, but I am in a proof reading mood
"Your" is frequently used where "you're" is meant. Also, I believe you mean "break" rather than "brake". Otherwise, this is not a bad poem.
posted by
cpklapper
on January 3, 2008 at 10:30 AM
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Okay, time to stop the pain. I liked the imagery and the very well placed rhyme. sam
posted by
sam444
on January 2, 2008 at 8:03 PM
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