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I could sense the suicidal note when seen and conversed with inner struggle, symbolized by the 'mirror'. Also it veers on hope, but the sudden change of direction is conveyed in the last line "
she doesn't notice anymore, now she's blind", left me absolutely astounded
. So telling in its beauty of the story of man. You're fanatastic Avi.
posted by
Bhaskar.ing
on March 7, 2008 at 8:42 AM
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At first very sad
but then a glimmer of hope. A well crafted poem!
posted by
Troosha
on March 7, 2008 at 8:11 AM
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wow...
She had so much promise, so much ambition,
but no one was there, there was no recognition,
that's all she ever wanted, someone to relate,
to say that they loved her, even that they hate,
yes... yes...you took my heart
posted by
star4sky5
on March 6, 2008 at 8:07 PM
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sublime to say the least.
posted by
thecryptkeeper
on March 6, 2008 at 11:40 AM
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Excellent!
gothic melancholy
posted by
BC-A
on March 5, 2008 at 2:57 PM
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This is beautifully constructed, a joy to read!
posted by
Soul_Builder101
on March 5, 2008 at 11:33 AM
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