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The scent of rainbows in the mist,
The feel of bird song from the gloom,
The gentle Sun's first morning kiss,
Makes an enticement of perfume,
The unexpected accidental touch
That sends shivers down your spine,
The voice you like to hear so much
That it's like savouring good wine:
A thousand sweet sensations
That enable you to feel
That exuberance of creation
That only beauty can reveal.
Thank you Sam, you are a genius 
posted by
lionreign
on March 17, 2008 at 3:27 PM
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If you bring out the aroma from the rainbow I believe it would tie together very well. Somehow project the feeling of the aroma from the first line to accentuate the fourth line where you speak of aroma (I believe it was the fourth line).I would take the comma out of it's if you are intending the possessive case. sam
posted by
sam444
on March 17, 2008 at 8:52 AM
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Excellent! Well done
posted by
Kayzzaman
on March 17, 2008 at 5:35 AM
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