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Joe, this is Awesome and I am just thrilled by the whole; turns and twists, visions and oh to read on of Agenor's Quest is a treasure to read. Write on!!!~ I'm all eyes and
Elyse
posted by
elysianfields
on July 9, 2008 at 8:32 PM
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i love this!
i always loved old poems like this. it takes great skill to write a modern one and still keep the old spirit.
i'm looking forward to the rest.
posted by
Luz_Briar
on July 9, 2008 at 12:24 PM
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NO No! Do not change it!!! At least, I don't think you should. I enjoyed it extremely the way it was written already. The pronoun change did make me do a double take but I knew who was speaking, because it was very obvious. I even think it is more powerful that way!!
posted by
NiteTide
on July 8, 2008 at 8:49 PM
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Re: NiteTide
I am glad that you enjoyed the poem. At the end of the poem it just felt like Agenor himself should speak, or perhaps by that time a part of me had become Agenor and I was speaking from my heart. If you, the readers, feel that it seems awkward, I am quite open to editing. Please let me know what you think. Again, thank you for your continued kind attention to my work.
Joe 
posted by
SFJoseph
on July 8, 2008 at 8:37 PM
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This was WONDERFUL!!! I was enraptured from the very first stanza!! ...which is why I must ask, why the sudden pronoun change from "he" to "I" in the last two stanzas? I'm afraid I had to stop and re-read them again to know I had not made a mistake! Wonderful job!!
posted by
NiteTide
on July 8, 2008 at 8:10 PM
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