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Amazing imagery! I felt it all and have sat in that lonely room. Beautiful imagery in its poignancy! sam
posted by
sam444
on July 11, 2008 at 9:31 AM
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thats a pretty sad one, joe.
posted by
Luz_Briar
on July 10, 2008 at 5:24 PM
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SF ~.~
So very well written...so wonderfully expressed. I felt the loneliness in each line. Thank you for sharing. Peace, blessings and understanding.
~SS
posted by
soulspeaker
on July 10, 2008 at 2:24 PM
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Bring It On...
Awesome technique and delivery my friend. You inspire us with your works
posted by
Smittenheimer
on July 10, 2008 at 8:09 AM
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Convincinly crafted.
posted by
EX_TURPI
on July 10, 2008 at 6:18 AM
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...very well done...moon
posted by
magic_moon
on July 10, 2008 at 5:29 AM
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lonliness is criminal and the sadest part is we all suffer in its path
the rath...
posted by
mysteria
on July 10, 2008 at 2:52 AM
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Dark days...Funny hoe I don't remember them Dad..Maybe this was before mom came into the picture..
posted by
Wigopa_
on July 10, 2008 at 12:08 AM
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Every line I know so well...excellent work!
posted by
teddypoet_TheGoodByeFade
on July 9, 2008 at 11:01 PM
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Excellent!
Well don’t sleep in the subway like some lonely people do! Take care, BCA! 
posted by
BC-A
on July 9, 2008 at 9:51 PM
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Such perfect depiction of the heart ache of loneliness... beautiful sad verses. I am glad this dark period of your life is in the past, for life has so much to offer to and needs so much from someone with your talent and inmense sensitivity. Take care of you my friend .
posted by
Sinome
on July 9, 2008 at 9:47 PM
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You have expressed both by image and by 'voice' here true effect and affect even, of loneliness ~ this touched my heart!~
Elyse
posted by
elysianfields
on July 9, 2008 at 8:28 PM
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Nicely done, SFJoseph. Good flow...
posted by
saul_relative
on July 9, 2008 at 7:48 PM
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Re: NiteTide
As always, thanks for your kind remarks. This poem was obviously from a darker period of the poets life. As for the correction, thank you very much. I have already done the edit. My brain and fingers had a momentary loss of communication.
Joe 
posted by
SFJoseph
on July 9, 2008 at 7:40 PM
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Well written...
I enjoyed this.
posted by
dark_mistress
on July 9, 2008 at 7:38 PM
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One question about a line: "Seem like there here to stay." - Should "there" be "they're" or am I completely wrong?
As for your poem in its entirety...the shuddering feeling of loneliness....you depict it in a most ravishing way...and I am forever in love with the weavings of your words. This was just wonderful...
posted by
NiteTide
on July 9, 2008 at 7:29 PM
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Wonderfully expressed.
Very well done. Thanks for sharing. - Chris
posted by
Marineair
on July 9, 2008 at 7:28 PM
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my dear sir, this is so sad...so touching...so well expressed...
posted by
__Purple_Mermaid11__
on July 9, 2008 at 7:24 PM
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