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I love how you wrote it from 2 different points of view, this is so profound!
posted by
mejustme
on August 21, 2008 at 3:00 PM
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Very good poem. The pretending but not wanting to be without. He's drifted from you and for that I'm sorry. To love so much and not have it returned to you. To have a marriage you thought would pull together but just fall apart at your feet. having both views was interesting as well. Very well said. I'm sorry for your such pain.
posted by
dpaulinomorris24
on August 21, 2008 at 9:19 AM
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Excellent write...probing questions!
posted by
Soul_Builder101
on August 21, 2008 at 8:42 AM
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Beautifully written
Perfectly balanced.. and an almost exact description of my marriage towards the end
posted by
lionreign
on August 20, 2008 at 2:57 AM
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very fair. you gave both of them half of the poem, and a chance to state their points. needless to say, it was very enjoyable
posted by
Luz_Briar
on August 19, 2008 at 7:14 PM
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Freedom!!! I must live free or I will surely die
I had a job that made me feel like a prisoner with the endless politics and other manuevers and suchness. It was horrible and because of the encroachment of my personal freedoms, my spirit began to literally die...If I didn't leave that job, I sometimes wonder if the rest of me would have too?
I don't know, all I know is Freedom is way too important to sacrifice !!!
Grace come to you, yours, and all hearts involved
Very nice poem BTW
posted by
mysteria
on August 18, 2008 at 5:11 PM
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So tragic. You've caught the emotion of this experience well...
posted by
Marineair
on August 18, 2008 at 4:19 AM
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Excellent my friend!
a novel idea showing both sides but always necessary; many blessings and thanks
posted by
mariaki
on August 18, 2008 at 3:45 AM
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Two sides of the coin
A great piece on the emotions on both sides.
posted by
NylaNani
on August 18, 2008 at 12:56 AM
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a big fat OUCH. There is just no such thing as a "clean break" is there?
posted by
NiteTide
on August 17, 2008 at 11:28 PM
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"I think you're a great person, but..." - that is always a breathtaking
line as one waits for whatever follows.
.."the end" is never good..
..
posted by
Rumor
on August 17, 2008 at 8:36 PM
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This was so real, great write!
posted by
jeansaw
on August 17, 2008 at 7:25 PM
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it never ends at the END
posted by
Star5_
on August 17, 2008 at 7:17 PM
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Finality exquisitely composed! sam
posted by
sam444
on August 17, 2008 at 6:45 PM
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How awful is the breakup of a dream and how mundane the fight
over who gets what. And it always has to come to that.
posted by
Kabu
on August 17, 2008 at 5:55 PM
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Yes, very nice. All it lacks are pictures.
posted by
_Dido_
on August 17, 2008 at 3:27 PM
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W0W!
What a wonderful poem!
posted by
Kolekshuns
on August 17, 2008 at 3:18 PM
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yum
posted by
benzinha
on August 17, 2008 at 1:51 PM
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I don't wanna say ...
... love is easy -
- genio
posted by
ggXpress
on August 17, 2008 at 1:30 PM
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Harderup
I liked how you gave us both sides of the coin... yup -we've all been there and it's painful alright.
posted by
Troosha
on August 17, 2008 at 7:54 AM
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My, my........
A page from almost everyone's life...........
posted by
Corbin_Dallas
on August 17, 2008 at 6:13 AM
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Wow, now that's a place of pain! Well written.
posted by
Ariala
on August 17, 2008 at 5:32 AM
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