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Master Piece of our time whole and awsome deep insight for human change!
posted by
Mystereo
on December 21, 2008 at 5:18 PM
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The essesence of grandeur!
posted by
sunsirae
on September 17, 2008 at 7:02 PM
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Stunning! 
Lyricism encapsulated in a a tight and harmonious cadence.
joe
posted by
LongoGeremia
on September 15, 2008 at 11:34 AM
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I really liked this stanza:
Behind iron curtains of reprisal
Molded walls of isolation
Guarded yet only by indifference and apathy
Hang the keys to a broader awareness
The pathways to a warmer embrace
Unfamiliar yet welcoming
I like the format it is in now. sam
posted by
sam444
on September 14, 2008 at 11:50 AM
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Thank you for visiting me.
Thanks!
posted by
Kolekshuns
on September 13, 2008 at 10:15 PM
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Awesome!
This is powerful!
posted by
Kolekshuns
on September 13, 2008 at 10:13 PM
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It reminds me of Plato’s cave. We want to reach the light carefully ~ Blog on! BCA, Bill’s Wave
posted by
BC-A
on September 13, 2008 at 9:38 PM
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Would that we could all bathe
In those ardent beams of prismatic innocence
Their highlit motes
Moving excitedly
On unseen currents of life, love
Drumbeats and passion, sadness and song
Daubs of paint sharing a palette
beautiful Chris. That is the message in a lot of poetry. We want to share this prismatic vision and excitement More paint on our palette please.
posted by
merkie
on September 13, 2008 at 8:08 PM
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Chris ...it is great... I loved it and I think it has to win whatever contest you enter it in. As for the format... I like it as it is, but I have found that the best way to forbat a poem is as it comes out of you... If it is formal and militar like... left and justtified by all means but if it just flows freely from your mind then let it float in the middle, no justification necesary for the different lenghts of the lines are like notes in a pentagram...they give the poem music and shape... Right I would go only for personal poems or things that are sentimental... but...that's me.
posted by
Sinome
on September 13, 2008 at 5:50 PM
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hi
really nice work
posted by
khyal
on September 13, 2008 at 4:10 PM
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This leaves me utterly speechless. No words to express my thoughts because there are too many things this poem is and no words are applicable to explain. But i think you should center align it...but that's just me
Beautiful writing
posted by
serendipity09
on September 13, 2008 at 4:08 PM
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A great poem ...
... filled with the passion of a brighter future of humankind ... time will show but, every step taken by those who yearn for peace, freedom and justice is a vital step on behalf of all of us ... and therefore your poem is a step in a significant direction - 
- genio
posted by
ggXpress
on September 13, 2008 at 3:45 PM
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