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Re: Bravo! Love this piece you have a gift you are using it well.
Thanks Mysterio
posted by
lionreign
on December 14, 2008 at 11:43 AM
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Re: hardilaziz
Thanks
posted by
lionreign
on December 14, 2008 at 11:42 AM
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Bravo! Love this piece you have a gift you are using it well.
posted by
Mystereo
on December 12, 2008 at 3:59 PM
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Song of peace and harmony.
posted by
hardilaziz
on December 10, 2008 at 7:51 AM
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Re: Merkie
thanks - it does appear that I am the only person who felt this poem unfinished, and as the only real sounding board is the reader I shall be guided by what I have read here and leave it alone.
posted by
lionreign
on December 9, 2008 at 7:37 AM
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Re: Merkie
Thank you, I am very glad you enjoyed it.
posted by
lionreign
on December 9, 2008 at 7:36 AM
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Re: BC-A
Thanks - that's the main goal
posted by
lionreign
on December 9, 2008 at 7:36 AM
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Re: Beautiful line about wandering winds
Thanks Malcolm
posted by
lionreign
on December 9, 2008 at 7:35 AM
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Re: Lion
Thanks Troosha, good to have your opinion
posted by
lionreign
on December 9, 2008 at 7:35 AM
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Re: We can always elaborate on our writing Lion
Thank you my friend. I know that problem well - each couplet becomes a stanza and all clarity is lost in the search for a more pristine image
posted by
lionreign
on December 9, 2008 at 7:31 AM
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Re: rubypoem
thank you so much
posted by
lionreign
on December 9, 2008 at 7:30 AM
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Re: Sam444
Thanks, it appears my sense of incompletion might just be me then :D
Oddly I spelt furore the English way but mentally pronounced it the American furor... nothing like logic
Luckily I meant it in the definition the two modes share
posted by
lionreign
on December 9, 2008 at 7:30 AM
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I just read your comment and want to say that the reader is the receiver and seems inspired by your thoughts. A soft tune heard on the wind rings into a waiting heart!It is a door the bids welcome to imagination and is complete!
posted by
merkie
on December 8, 2008 at 5:44 PM
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Wandering on the wind and washed by the waves to distant shores What special messages you send.Excellent content Lion!
posted by
merkie
on December 8, 2008 at 5:40 PM
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I feel the emotion.
posted by
BC-A
on December 8, 2008 at 4:20 PM
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Beautiful line about wandering winds
posted by
malcolm
on December 8, 2008 at 10:03 AM
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Lion
The dichotomy of separate yet together… didn’t feel the piece was incomplete.
posted by
Troosha
on December 8, 2008 at 7:17 AM
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We can always elaborate on our writing Lion
the problem being if we feel something is lacking in something we have written and work on it more it ends up becoming somewhat of a saga (this happened to me the other day!) to my mind this piece is in no way incomplete and says much; many blessings and thanks
posted by
mariaki
on December 8, 2008 at 5:09 AM
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'wandering winds' and 'vagabond journeys' - beautiful, it read so beautifully!seems no more could be said, lovely!thank you for the read.
posted by
rubypoem
on December 8, 2008 at 4:45 AM
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I didn't have a problem with it being incomplete, quite the opposite for me. I like how you used furor as well, did the meaning not the spelling. I thought the first stanza set up the second stanza quite well. My initial reaction was that it bode congruity! I liked the imagery that involved elements of nature. sam
posted by
sam444
on December 8, 2008 at 3:27 AM
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Notes From The Lion
This poem is a tad on the sketchy side and feels unfinished to me, but I reached the point where I was not improving any more, just changing. I deeply appreciate your opinions on all my poems, but would like to reassure you that I will not be upset if you feel this poem lacks something and choose to offer an opinion on what (in fact I will be grateful for the gift of perspective). When my creativity flags I am happy to examine options offered by others
posted by
lionreign
on December 8, 2008 at 3:11 AM
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