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Aba, --- I'm amazed at your poetic depth; every time you write --- you are so wise in that you reckon with an emptiness of Love - like an introspective battle here and then it reminds me of Songs of Solomon - yes of Solomon and all his riches yet...how step by step even yes, not only love but - it's by wisdom and understanding that we or Man would be led to salvation. Aba - I commend you - for this is truly a great poem. I am very pleased to have read; touched my heart even more
. Ely
posted by
elysianfields
on December 18, 2009 at 9:03 PM
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Re: Excellent piece of writing here!
I'm so glad you liked the piece, Ariala.
posted by
anib
on December 18, 2009 at 7:41 PM
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Excellent piece of writing here!
posted by
Ariala
on December 18, 2009 at 6:50 PM
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sam444
You are one real encourager, a dear soul, sam. I am truly excited that you could see my contribution as laden from top to bottom with conveyance of transitioning to salvation, and would therefore like me to do a critique as though I had not written it. Your wish is not just a humble thought but a command for me, since I see you very high as a poet, more so as a person.. I'll love to elaborate in prose, if not tonight, definitely tomorrow (I've just got in), and thank you so very much
posted by
anib
on December 18, 2009 at 6:48 PM
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shamasehar
Thank you shama. It took me a lot of time doing this and I realized how difficult it is to write poetry, a lot of things need to be compressed, which you all do so well.
posted by
anib
on December 18, 2009 at 6:38 PM
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See, you analyze poetry long enough, you have an innate gift and things come together as though they were meant to be. I think it would be outstanding if you took this poem and objectively critique as though you had not written it. It is loaded top to bottom with conveyance of transitioning to salvation; I offer this as an example:
somnolence. I immediately went to mental 'sleep-walking'; the confusion we create along the way, like sleep walking! Just my humble thought.
Thank you for understanding the message of my poem, it was an exclusive. Some times people approach things in the wrong way and it gets too distorted for me. sam
posted by
sam444
on December 18, 2009 at 7:52 AM
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What a blissful journey of the body,mind & soul! Great expression!
posted by
shamasehar
on December 18, 2009 at 2:07 AM
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Darson
'Wordsmithing', isn't that a nice word? Your's are no less and so decorated.
posted by
anib
on December 17, 2009 at 11:30 PM
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Is it too lame to say 'ditto' to a lot of these comments....nevertheless...I echo the sentiments. Your wordsmithing is very beautiful and thoughtful. Well done, as usual.
posted by
Darson
on December 17, 2009 at 9:27 PM
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magic_moon
That is a wonderfully moving comment for me which I will always cherish and treasure.
posted by
anib
on December 17, 2009 at 7:32 PM
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Rain
Your wanderings in the garden of my thught-paintings and finding it a wonderful experience gives me my fulfilment. Many thanks
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posted by
anib
on December 17, 2009 at 7:29 PM
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shobana
You think I am being good (in poetry)? Hahaha, just fooling around. Your encouragements do wonders for my poetic skills. Thank you so much and you too take care and get exhausted in enjoyment.
posted by
anib
on December 17, 2009 at 7:26 PM
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Abanerjee - I have heard the same thing about love too. What an outstanding poem for reflection. Thanks so much for your visit and lovely comment. I am here today, gone tomorrow..lol. My guests are away (yesterday and today) and tomorrow we will be heading for the east coast. Sometimes enjoying yourself too much can be soo...exhausting..lol. Take care will you and have a blessed time.
posted by
shobana
on December 17, 2009 at 7:03 PM
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...your cup runneth over aba...to the benefit of all who come into your orbit...moon 
posted by
magic_moon
on December 17, 2009 at 1:36 PM
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wandering through the thoughts you paint is a wonderful experience
posted by
Blue_feathers
on December 17, 2009 at 11:05 AM
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