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And Bro - I can't believe I forgot your
posted by
adnohr
on August 17, 2013 at 9:07 PM
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Oops Dr JTP - I forgot your
posted by
adnohr
on August 17, 2013 at 9:06 PM
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I have a daughter too, and a granddaughter, and a great
granddaughter who will arrive shortly. No-one wants to think of any child going through such a thing, especially OUR children, but it does happen far too often to ignore.
posted by
adnohr
on August 17, 2013 at 9:05 PM
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Nautikos, you write about rape, even if it is done under
the guise of shaira law, so maybe not considered 'rape'. The story isn't actually about the event, but the effects it will have on my Lady and the way she deals with it.
posted by
adnohr
on August 17, 2013 at 9:03 PM
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Thank you LostInLife.
posted by
adnohr
on August 17, 2013 at 9:00 PM
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Any action like this is a part of blackness, WIley
Unfortunately, it is also part of some peoples' lives.
posted by
adnohr
on August 17, 2013 at 8:27 PM
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adnohr
Great upsetting writing, because it doesn't read like fiction, it reads like the blackness of live sis.
posted by
WileyJohn
on August 17, 2013 at 7:39 PM
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Excellent writing! I was put in an intense mode to have some real pain inflicted ion that predator quickly by someone who has been watching him. Having a daughter I could not read about that type trauma in detail.
posted by
Dr_JPT
on August 16, 2013 at 7:34 PM
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adnohr
Good writing, but I must confess I don't like stories about rape...
posted by
Nautikos
on August 16, 2013 at 7:30 PM
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Re: Don't worry, LostInLife, I won't post the whole story
very real bud! I actually felt for my family and you made me feel things I never thought I could.. I had worried today that I had upset you with my comment, came back to say to delete and was welcomed by your response.
Kudos for real, you drew an emotion and thought that I truly hope I never ever have to deal with in the real world!!
posted by
SomeoneElse
on August 16, 2013 at 4:44 PM
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You are right, CCT. I deleted that part and it reads much better!!!
Thank you! 2 smiles for you...and a wink!
posted by
adnohr
on August 16, 2013 at 2:05 PM
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Ok Adnohr if it were me I would just leave the line about cars out I think it would tighten the tension. Otherwise it is what it is meant to be bloody terrifying.
posted by
C_C_T
on August 16, 2013 at 12:11 PM
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Thank you, Rumor, because that is the whole point!
posted by
adnohr
on August 16, 2013 at 12:09 PM
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The Lady is intense, Ciel, and not at all coy.
Her experiences didn't allow her to be so, but she has to learn... Thank you.
posted by
adnohr
on August 16, 2013 at 12:08 PM
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Thank you, Pat-B!!
I love you hating it!!
posted by
adnohr
on August 16, 2013 at 12:05 PM
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Thank you, Blue Feathers
If it is upsetting, then I've achieved what I wanted to achieve. But it is a story.
posted by
adnohr
on August 16, 2013 at 12:05 PM
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And that, TAPS, is what my Lady is all about
Her innocence, or lack of. Thank you.
posted by
adnohr
on August 16, 2013 at 12:04 PM
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You are right in that it's unending, Jay.
That kind of experience stays wth you the rest of your life. Thank you.
posted by
adnohr
on August 16, 2013 at 12:03 PM
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I'll put in some of it, MsJudy, but not all.
It's supposed to end up a book - we'll see. But thank you!
posted by
adnohr
on August 16, 2013 at 12:02 PM
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I did too even as I was writing it, Justi.
Thank you!
posted by
adnohr
on August 16, 2013 at 12:01 PM
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Thank you Bro
And yep, I figured it would get your Irish up!
posted by
adnohr
on August 16, 2013 at 12:00 PM
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Thank you FSI
posted by
adnohr
on August 16, 2013 at 11:59 AM
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Don't worry, LostInLife, I won't post the whole story
I just wanted to get a fix on how real it sounded to readers. WHat better way than to ask Blogit members?
posted by
adnohr
on August 16, 2013 at 11:59 AM
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Thank you Kabu! Good, that's what I'm aiming for - feeling.
Here's yours : xxx
posted by
adnohr
on August 16, 2013 at 11:52 AM
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adnohr...you certainly stir our emotions with this first scene....
You "grab and hook" us into wanting to know more, but we fear what is going to happen next....
posted by
Rumor
on August 16, 2013 at 8:28 AM
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Intense...
you and your Lady are telling a tough story, not messing around, not being coy...
posted by
Ciel
on August 16, 2013 at 6:24 AM
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It seems way too real. I absolutely hate it.
Brilliant writing!
posted by
Pat_B
on August 16, 2013 at 5:33 AM
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It feels very real.. very upsettling to me.. 
posted by
Blue_feathers
on August 16, 2013 at 5:03 AM
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You have a way of drawing the readers into your writing. It is so easy to hate that predator and wish God's curse upon him before the little one is hurt. She is already traumatized and will never be innocent again.
posted by
TAPS.
on August 15, 2013 at 11:26 PM
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It is almost too much, well written, but sad and unending.
posted by
UtahJay
on August 15, 2013 at 11:05 PM
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I am very enthralled right now and am waiting for another tip bit of this story! I think I am going to really like it alot!
posted by
MsJudy
on August 15, 2013 at 10:20 PM
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Yo are a talented writer. I wanted to shoot him before he went another step!
posted by
Justi
on August 15, 2013 at 10:06 PM
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adnohr
You are a gifted writer, but I hate reading of females being assaulted. Shows how good you a writer you are 'ma soeur,' I was so angry I wished I could have gone after him.
posted by
WileyJohn
on August 15, 2013 at 9:17 PM
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A very intense scene you got there...I imagine that it is realistic.
posted by
FormerStudentIntern
on August 15, 2013 at 7:09 PM
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I hope the little girl gets away with no harm and not too much emotional trauma.. I have a daughter and will not be able read much farther. You are talented with your painting.
posted by
SomeoneElse
on August 15, 2013 at 7:05 PM
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I am already feeling emotions...hands turned to claws, I want to protect this little girl...Says that you have got me feeling and wanting to read more. Wanting to read that this monster gets what he deserves...eventually. write on! 
posted by
Kabu
on August 15, 2013 at 4:41 PM
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