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Whoa. This is amazing. I can feel the emotion... it makes me feel helpless, saddened. I especially like this stanza.
The trickle of seconds that sweetens love's birth
lulls even the wary to follow the flow.
Ignoring the pain that is more than it's worth.
and clinging to something that just won't let go.
The rhythm of this poem is wonderful. I'm mouthing it aloud as I read, and boy does it just roll off the tongue. Outstanding job.
posted by
Sirenayla
on June 22, 2014 at 3:11 PM
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very sad and beautiful
posted by
Annicita
on June 10, 2014 at 8:05 AM
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it made me think one lover was dieing and the other lover was in pain, wishing they could do more. me thinks i just dont understand poetry.
posted by
jeansaw
on June 9, 2014 at 11:58 AM
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You do a great job building on the emotions that are being felt.
posted by
FormerStudentIntern
on June 7, 2014 at 11:14 AM
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This is part of the human nature. Nice poem 
posted by
Chuck_E_Ibrahim
on June 7, 2014 at 10:52 AM
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Does nothing endure but our hope and illusion of the possibility? I suppose not... 
posted by
Nautikos
on June 7, 2014 at 8:59 AM
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C.C.T.
Aah kisses make good trinklets sir.
posted by
BC-A
on June 7, 2014 at 8:54 AM
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If it were meant to last it would probably have lasted....Sad how some relationships start out so promising just to fizzle away.
posted by
Kabu
on June 6, 2014 at 8:24 PM
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Simple lack of clear communication
erodes many a relationship.
posted by
Ciel
on June 6, 2014 at 11:31 AM
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