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G'day. I'm new to this whole blogging thing, and I've just been browsing your journal and have found it quite entertaining - humor is so important these days . . . isn't it? Now, to the point at hand. I just read your short story and must say it ain't that bad at all - says he that has been writing for well over twenty years and still doesn't know a great deal about writing - but that's neither hither nor thither, I just thought (yes, I do sometimes, think that is) I'd let you know. Best of luck - I say that maybe too early or too late, as I haven't read the rest of your journal yet . . . oh, by the way, thirty is nothing, you're still young and fit, wait till you reach my age, but then again, age really is irrelevant isn't it. One's mind dictates one's age, the body is but a vessel. Enough philophosizing (oh dear, I've erred...about people sometimes getting letters around the wrong way. Sorry, couldn't resist that, must be my Aussie sense of humor). Still having said all that, well done. Looking forward to actually reading the rest of your 'entrees'.
posted by
Alkamyst
on February 5, 2004 at 10:30 PM
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RAINE
Thanks bunches!
posted by
Jemmie211
on January 27, 2004 at 11:19 AM
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good luck in the competition
posted by
raine
on January 27, 2004 at 11:15 AM
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TooeleWriterGal--
Did you post your short story on BN? If not, are you willing to do so? Or share it in email? I'd like to read what you submitted.
posted by
Jemmie211
on January 26, 2004 at 12:39 PM
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Thanks All!
To those who left comments and to those who didn't...thanks for reading! Poet, you're right. Others' being gentle won't always help my writing, but it does protect my fragile ego.
posted by
Jemmie211
on January 26, 2004 at 10:39 AM
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Gryphon
You're right about the fraction, but I just didn't think it looked right written out either. As for Joe complaing about the person/animal yapping...I had originally written "yapping to the cops," but then I figured I needed to change it to "anyone" to be more ambiguous--leave more room for Nancy to misinterpret things. It could very well be that Joe was talking about a dog and not actually involved in the Ducci crime ring. We really don't know for sure. But we do all know that Nancy seems to jump to conclusions.
posted by
Jemmie211
on January 26, 2004 at 10:38 AM
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Aside from writing out
one quarter instead of using the numerals, I think you did really well. Of course, I got the impression that Joe was talking about putting a dog to sleep for "yapping to just anyone." LOL Had to read it twice.
posted by
GRYPHON
on January 26, 2004 at 7:29 AM
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I'm not sure if being gentle helps us as writers, I don't know. Maybe I'm wrong. I haven't had the courage yet to ask people to be ruthless with my writing. I wonder if I get the courage if it wouldn't help me more. Ummmmmmmmmmm Good luck on your submission!!!!!
posted by
poetjpb
on January 25, 2004 at 9:53 PM
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Cool
And you got humor and a happy ending! I couldn't think of anything funny with mine!
posted by
TooeleWriterGal
on January 25, 2004 at 5:40 PM
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That was pretty good. Mine is posted around here someplace. Let me know how you do.
posted by
Passionflower
on January 25, 2004 at 10:44 AM
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